Good art, but...
I don't really see the point of this. There's no story or interactivity other than changing the images... Have I missed something?
Sound is an issue
The animation was pretty good, and the sound effects fitted well, but it's a shame they were so low quality, kind of let the thing down, definitely made me want to quit watching it. Not that I did, still, hurt ya ears, ya know?
Anywho, pretty nice, keep up the good work :D
how do i make the sounds high quality?
It was kinda creepy, but it was pretty short, the colouring and drawing lacked skill and the timing seemed a bit out at points, both in the shot timing and the individual animation actions.
First things first, work on your colouring and drawing; Johnny Utah has a video on Vimeo called "You're Dumb at Flash: How to Color like a Winner" which, despite it's name, is actually a really good guide.
Your background was lacking in detail, or more, subtlety. As for animation, try and make it a bit more fluid, and a little less jerky. The audio was also... well, lacking in quality, make sure to export properly and make sure your audio is recorded sufficiently. Finally, if your gunna use gradients, use them subtlety, by that I mean, make sure the colour difference isn't THAT great between the colours.
Anyways, good luck in the future and keep practicing! :D
Ok, but great improvement is needed.
Firstly, its a lot better than some of your animations, I'll give you that. But, don't submit tests to any website! Sure you could just not listen to me, but tests are tests, don't make a test into a full animation just because you think its better than all your other tests.
The character looks good and I like your art style but, why doesn't his arms move? Think about it, people move their arms when they walk or if they don't they put them in their pockets. When a person walks, their shoes bend and flex, why doesn't the character's shoes bend? These little details are the sort of things that inject life into your animations. Did you tween the whole walk cycle?
Also, I know its a music video so it may have a undeveloped, short plot or no plot at all, but one thing a music video will have is movement in time and in sync with the music, in my opinion, I don't see and synchronization.
Finally, the starting screen is quite frankly ugly, if you don't make the starting screen attractive and interesting people are going think the rest of your animation is the same before even pressing the play button, many people may be rash and just vote zero and exit without even playing the animation! This would be a great shame, so spend some time working on that.
Little details, hard work and time are the things that make animations great. Some amazing animations are in production for 6 months or more, the more time you spend on it the better animation it would seem, but only if you work non-stop and work hard adding detail and life.
I hope you found this review helpful and I look forward to your next work.
I think the art is great, but truthfully I think the animation isn't very in sync with the music at the start and towards the end I think there is too much going on on the screen. Also it seems to have no narrative and/or message, but then again it is a music video. So I think you could be a great animator, only practice some more and spend more time on your animation, to be a good animator you have to be patient. Spend around a few weeks to a month or two making, planning and sripting you next animation and try to give it a story :D Anyway good luck, look forward to seeing more of your stuff!
thanks, i shall!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I think its really good only one thing. Its quite short, seeing how good this is I recommend that you play around with flash a bit more then try something longer :D
i sure will, i could extend this or make a whole new one im tryin to decide now, what do you think?
Ive got some stuff you could do to make it better, In the water travel make the water animation better and for the one where hes falling through the air put in a background. Otherwise the animations OK, try something different next time though.
Movie doesn't play properly for me, it seems to be stuck on the first frame. A loader would be helpful as well.
This is great. The drawings are at times simple but the movie is still very professonal, the voice acting fits the characters and is high quality and the actual animation is very smooth. Also the idea for the flash is very original. infact this is an amazing flash! Great work, looking forward to the full Hamster Jam!
I can see you put alot of time and effort into this and tryed to make it the best you can. Tip one: add some sfx you can get them from alot of different sites e.g sound snap or flash kit.
Tip two: try to improve your drawing and use symbols.
Tip three: use some basic action scripting it can be very usefull.
Tip four: look at the tutorial collection in newgrounds it is VERY usefull
Thanks for the tip, i am a coder already :p
Granted i am not very good at coding but i am still trying my drawing skills.
Thanks for the tips and the reviews.
Positive, then tips!
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